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01 February 2012 @ 09:15 pm
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♥ This meme is for Arrow family prompts. Gen prompts focusing on any member of the Arrow family are welcome. Pairing prompts can be Arrow/any character.

♥ The members of the Arrow family are defined as Oliver Queen, Roy Harper, Dinah Lance, Lian Harper, Connor Hawke and Mia Dearden.

♥ Both anon and signed-in posts are welcome.

♥ One prompt per comment. You may post as many comments as you wish.

♥ All canons and continuities welcome. This extends to games, movies and television, be it animated or live-action.

♥ When prompting, note your desired pairing in the subject line. For gen, note the main character(s). Try to include keywords in your subject line.

♥ When filling, add the word FILL to your subject line.

♥ Warn for anything that could be triggering. For those who do not want to use specific warnings, please warn for ‘no warnings’ or ‘disturbing content’ as applicable.

♥ Be respectful and warn for spoilers!

♥ Please report your fills. Multiple fills are encouraged.

These are an extremely condensed version of the rules. Please try to take the time to read through the full rules when you can. If you have any questions, let me know here.
(Anonymous) on February 2nd, 2012 09:42 pm (UTC)
Roy Harper/Dick Grayson
Roy teaches Dick how to shoot. Being that physically close and sharing something so personal leads to more than a little sexual tension.
(Anonymous) on February 3rd, 2012 02:36 pm (UTC)
Re: Roy Harper/Dick Grayson
yeees, i love this trope. seconded.
(Anonymous) on February 6th, 2012 06:59 pm (UTC)
Re: Roy Harper/Dick Grayson
phyllomania: Roy gunphyllomania on February 26th, 2012 01:08 am (UTC)
Fill: Breathe
Fill, although I'm afraid it's rife with rather awkward tenses:

On LJ:

On AO3:

...I'm going to ask for an unscreen, since I imagine it has been for one of the two links ^^;
DCU Memesdcu_memes on February 26th, 2012 01:13 am (UTC)
Re: Fill: Breathe
Both this and the fills post comment are now unscreened for you. :)
(Anonymous) on February 26th, 2012 03:26 am (UTC)
Re: Fill: Breathe
A fantastic fill!

You created a real sense of intimacy between them, in the way they touched, in the way their breathing aligned. And Roy's frustration was beautifully realized, his anger and the way Dick's so damn good at pushing through and getting to the source of it.

Since you specifically asked for concrit and mentioned the "awkward tenses", I have to admit that at times things could be a little confusing to follow. Maybe telling yourself you're going to stick to one tense only could help? Often, in those cases, it's easier to stick to past tense, because if you refer to something that already took place within the fic, the shift isn't too jarring. And you seem to default to past tense a lot, so maybe that's where you're most comfortable? I've just lifted a random sentence here as an example:

Dick groaned and wondered when shooting an arrow had become quite such a loaded activity, moments before his head hits the wall and he pushed Roy back, just to get some space, because Roy isn’t going to get all the fun.

There are two jumps to present tense in there. But the whole sentence seems to be happening in the same moment, so mixing present and past tense isn't necessary. So it might make sense to stick to one tense, for example:

Dick groaned and wondered when shooting an arrow had become quite such a loaded activity, moments before his head hit the wall and he pushed Roy back, just to get some space, because Roy wasn’t going to get all the fun.

It's just something to keep an eye out for in the future. But that's just a minor suggestion and overall, I absolutely loved the fic! There was a real sense of history between the boys, and the sex was just as fumbling and needy and hot as I'd want to see when all that beautiful UST between them breaks! Thank you so much for sharing it, I really enjoyed it.
phyllomaniaphyllomania on February 26th, 2012 04:34 am (UTC)
Re: Fill: Breathe
Thank you so much for taking the time to write such detailed feedback. I appreciate it more than you may know. :)

The tense thing is a constant struggle for me. I've used both tenses in fics, always one tense to a story (except for one where I was messing about and rotated tenses between chapters, but that was simply me trying to be creative). Usually it depends on what's going to happen in the fic. When characters are just sitting around and talking or doing mundane activities I tend to stick to the past tense. When heavy emotions come into play in a scene where stuff is happening, I tend to gravitate towards present tense. Unfortunately, for fics where both things are going on...that means my brain gets confused. It was worse with this fic than usual. Possibly because it started off, and I intended to write it as, just a sequence of events, and then suddenly there was incredibly fumbling sex and all sorts of emotions I hadn't actually intended to write at the start (I doubt anyone seeing the outline for this would believe it was for the same fic). So I was constantly struggling against my brain to keep it in the past tense despite my usual default for scenes like that being to write in the present tense.

It probably didn't help that I'm working on a multi-part fill for another prompt right now that IS in present tense. I bumped this up the fill list because I needed a mental break from that one.

Thank you for the comment on how to fix that sentence. It's actually one, of several, that I stared at for a long time, cocking my head in various directions in hopes that I could figure out what was wrong with it! I imagine I shall be coming back and editing this one for a long time to come. Which isn't something I normally like to do, but I wanted to get this "published" because this meme needs love. Gotta keep those pink hearts in the fill list! ^^; I was afraid if I didn't post it now I'd just be staring at it for weeks and maybe eventually just give up and decide not to post it due to too many awkward sentences. Now, though, it's available to the public and if I don't want to have a horrendous mess of words on the internet messing up fandom I'm going to have to fix it! :D

Thanks again. I'll continue to go through the fic and try to fix tenses (and thank you for saying that they were confusing to you as well!), and I'm very glad that you liked it. <3
(Anonymous) on February 26th, 2012 04:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you x 100. :) <3 <3